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"En ingles y toda la cosa" by ~kowoyoshi:iconkowoyoshi:





El vivía en un mundo de fantasía, un mundo por él construido desde muy pequeño.
Por influencia de los cuentos para niños y la televisión cedió más a la fantasía que a la realidad y entonces, dio cabida a este mundo que nos es tan ajeno, tan… irreal, tan hermoso.

Al principio, fue un espía, luego fue un guerrero que con ayuda de los seres de su planeta rescataba princesas, entonces fue un héroe, un hechicero, un sabio que aprendió la inmortalidad, un famoso y reconocido en todo el mundo, y entonces le proclamaron rey del mundo. Más que rey, era un “todo”, su mente tan bien ejercitada soportaba el planeta en sí, desde el habitante más pequeño, hasta los mas enormes, cada pequeño detalle que en el tronco de un árbol a lo largo de sus caminatas por los bosques encantados marcaba, cada nube figurando una batalla épica, rasgos faciales, mugre de uñas, y todo dentro de su cabeza, y con ello, bien hacía lo que quería.

En realidad su mundo era perfectamente envidiable. Pi, como rey del mundo, no permitía injusticias, daba a cada quien lo que correspondía, y de buen corazón cedía a una cara triste para hacerla sonreír. Sus planes eran magníficos, se construían paisajes de la noche a la mañana, restauraba un bosque, lo extendía y construía poblados. Más que nunca, en su mundo, los habitantes eran felices.

Mientras tanto, en el mundo real, Pi dormía más que profundamente en una cama individual, con cables que a falta de nutrientes le alimentaban y costosos aparatos a los costados.


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He lived in a world of fantasy, a world constructed by him since he was small. Influenced by children stories and television, he gave up to fantasy, instead of reality and gave space to that world that is so far away from us… so unreal, so precious.

At the beginning he was a spy; then a warrior that, with the help of the people of his planet, rescued princesses; then became a hero; later a wizard, a wise man that learned immortality; famous and known all over, and then acclaimed king of the world. Rather a  king, he was everything. His prodigal mind supported the whole planet, from the smallest inhabitant to the biggest ones, each small detail marked by him on the trunks of the trees throughout his long walks thru enchanted forests, each cloud appearing an epic battle, the personal characteristics of the people, the dirt on their nails. All in his head, with it he constructed everything.  

In fact his world was perfectly enviable. Pi, as the king of the world, did not allow injustices, gave every one what they deserved, and with his good heart made sad faces smile. His plans were magnificent. Landscapes were constructed overnight, he restored  a forest, extended it, and constructed towns. In his world, much more than in any times,  the inhabitants were happy.

Meanwhile, in the real world, Pi,  slept more than deeply in an individual bed, with cables that, due the lack of nutrients, fed him, and expensive medical apparatuses to his flanks.
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Author's Comments

[La fotografía la tomó mi hermana en Santiago de Chile]

Va pues, éste cuento se empezó a escribir a las 4:48 de la tarde y se terminó a las 5:15 de la misma tarde.

Es tarea de ingles para mañana y pues aquí todo a última hora...

La instrucción decía: "Escribir un cuento de 250 palábras"
NO ALCANZA! deveras que no es suficiente, cómo expresar la sensación de Pi en 250 palabras?
Por eso quedó así, en realidad no me gusta...

Total -con el apoyo incondicional de José Eduardo y Frank y sin su permiso(...)- escribí esto en español, pero luego...
Oh sorpresa, cómo pasarlo al ingles sin que se afecte de manera irremediable?

La prueba de lo mediocre del ingles es este cuento!

PD: Se aceptan correcciones a la traducción

Nota final: Pi en matemáticas es la cantidad de veces que cabe el diámetro de un círculo en su circunferencia, y es igual a...
3.1415926535897932384626433832795028841971 69399375105820974944 5923078164 0628620899 8628034825 34211706798214808651 3282306647 0938446095 5058223172 53594081284811174502 8410270193 8521105559 6446229489 54930381964428810975 6659334461 2847564823 3786783165 27120190914564856692 3460348610 4543266482 1339360726 02491412737245870066 0631558817 4881520920 9628292540 91715364367892590360 0113305305 4882046652 1384146951 94151160943305727036 5759591953 0921861173 8193261179 31051185480744623799 6274956735 1885752724 8912279381 8301194912 con muchos decimales mas

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:iconkowoyoshi:
Los comentarios de José Eduardo después de leer la versión en Ingles:
[José Eduardo] dice:
He lived in a world of fantasy, a world constructed by him since he was small.
esa oración no tiene sentido

[Yo] respondo:
tu siguele
ahorita te explico

[José Eduardo] dice:
ando modificando algunas oraciones
agregando y quitando cosas para que quede bien
por que algunas estan muy bizarramente escritas

~Le envié un zumbido~

[Yo] le digo:
aa
checa
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*Conclución: El ingles es un idioma mediocre

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:iconwolfong:
¡Eso es todo! =O si esta muy padre, la verdad.
Lo que no me gustó fue que al final no se muere =/.

Es Euclides el primero en demostrar que la relación entre el perímetro y el diámetro de una circunferencia es constante ;).

Luego publicamos nuestros cuentos :horns:.

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Plaudite, amici, comedia finita est.
:iconjepl:
jajaja te pasas de lanza emilio!!! jajajaja
weno... ya disque corregí ese cuento en inglés, espero que haya quedado bien... porcierto... sube el cuento en inglés ya corregido!!! =P

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:iconkowoyoshi:
[José Eduardo] dice:
we sube mi versión corregida a tu deviant XD
[Yo] respondo:
ok

Aquí la versión corregida 1.1BETA

uie

He lived in a world of fantasy, a world he constructed since he was small. Influenced by childish stories and television, he gave up to fantasy, instead of reality, and gave space to that world that is so far away from us… so unreal, so precious.

At the beginning he was a spy; then a warrior that with the help of the people of his planet, rescued princesses; then became a hero; later a wizard, a wise man that learned immortality. Famous and known all over the world, he then became acclaimed king of the world. He was everything except a king. His prodigal mind supported the whole planet, from the smallest inhabitant to the biggest ones, each small detail marked by him on the trunks of the trees throughout his long walks thru enchanted forests, each cloud appearing an epic battle, the personal characteristics of the people, like the dirt on their nails. All in his head, with it he constructed everything.

In fact his world was perfectly enviable. Pi, as the king of the world, didn’t allowed injustices, he gave everyone what they deserved, and with his good heart made sad faces smile. His plans were magnificent; landscapes were constructed overnight, he restored forests, extended them, and constructed towns. In his world, much more than in any times, the inhabitants were happy.

Meanwhile, in the real world, Pi slept more than deep in individual bed with cables that fed him, due to the lack of nutrients, and expensive devices to his flanks.

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:iconphantasmalkitty:
I hope you can read English well enough to understand this because although I speak some Spanish I am too tired to write in Spanish right now. If you don't understand, I will translate later.

This is a really good story, and your English is good. Most of your mistakes are with punctuation, but it still makes sense. Also, "thru" is spelled "through."

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:iconjepl:
mate, in british english, wich we get tought, its thru and not through

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:iconjepl:
hehehe, by the way, i didnt meant to be disrespectful =P
Also thnx for the help you are offering =D
cya, good night i am off to sleep xD

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:iconphantasmalkitty:
Oh, ok. Well "thru" makes more sense anyway, and I didn't take it disrespectfully.

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"I just can't sit any other way than this. If I sit the way other people do, my reasoning ability drops by forty percent."
:iconkowoyoshi:
Thanks for reading the tale. :)

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